▶ Your Answer :
The given table charts illustrates the
number of people who watched see the various of movies in the cinema in five different
countries
In brief, what stands out from the table is
that, Action movie is the best movie among rather than the other movies, and then the
citizens of India watched the most movies among the five countries
In more detail, the movie viewing watched movies figure
from India was were normally far higher than the three other four different countries in action,
romance and comedy with 8 million, 7.5 million and 6.5 million, respectively,
while Indian saw the less viewers in horror movies than other movies. In addition, Japan,
New Zealand and Ireland followed a similar patterns, all remaining between 7.1
to 7.6 million. <(of what?) In addition, the minimum of citizen in the lowest genre popularity in Ireland was accounted
for the romance movie with 3.8 million
On top of this, the comedy had a slightly
higher figure for Japan by 0.1 million than that of 3.9 million for New Zealand.
Furthermore, a great number of people preferred watching horror movies in
Ireland with 6.4 million, compared to Japanese people who saw the least this movie the least with
2.2 million.
Score: 6 Comment: 내용 정리가 잘 안되어있습니다. 어떤 방식이나 order로 내용을 전달해주시는지 잘 모르겠습니다. 약간 random하게 내용을 전달 해주시는 것 같습니다. 내용 grouping/organization에 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 그리고 total values에 대해서도 어느정도 전달을 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 그 외에는 표현에 조금 더 신경을 써주시고 specificity에도 주의를 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 일부 표현이 어색하게 들리는 경우가 있습니다. 또한 detail이 틀리거나 insufficient하거나 누락이 된 경우도 있습니다. 수고 하셨습니다! |