▶ Your Answer : The line graph illustrates the monthly
beverage sales in a restaurant from May to October 2015.
Overall, the coffee sales were more than those that of tea. During the At the beginning month of May and of September, the number of tea sold was
higher than that of coffee.
In May, tea started with the tea sold at about 6,200 cups while the sales for coffee started with the number were close to 5,500 cups. 그냥 월별로 수치를 기록한 자료가 수치변화를 기록한 꺾은선 그래프이니 '그 달에 최고 많이 팔린 기록'이라거나 '언제를 기점으로 coffee가 더 많이 팔렸다'거나 하는 구체적인 내용이 필요할 것 같아요. In May, a month, the coffee
sales overtook the tea sales at close to 6,000 cups, whereas tea recorded at
below 4,000 cups. After that, the trend for both beverage experienced the same
patterns until late July. Both beverages had a semi-weekly fluctuation where
mid-June had incremental sales of around 7,800 coffee and 4,000 teas, and it
dropped by early July before it peaked up.
From late July, the sales patterns for
coffee and tea distinguished. While the coffee had a declining sale to reach at
its lowest sales figures at 4,000 cups by late August, tea teas showed a continuous
increasing trend to reach at its peak of over 6,000 cups by mid-September. This
sales figure had bounced back to the May’s sales figure before it experienced a
drastic plummet to end at close to 1,000 cups. Concurrently, there were was 4,000
cups of coffee sold by Mid-September. 9월 중순까지 4000잔의 커피가 팔렸다는 내용은 도표와 다릅니다. 자료는 중순에 커피가 제일 많이 팔렸다가 월말에 4000잔까지 떨어지는 수치를 보입니다.
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