▶ Your Answer : The table shows the amount of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was renovated. modified. The charts show the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction in each time. during same two periods.
It is obvious that the number of visitor to Ashdown Museum is increased after refurbishment from 74,000 to 92,000. This means that the renovation modified work attracted many people about to the museum. Now lets look at the charts. The year before refurbishment shows that the number of very dissatisfied and dissatisfied people was 50% in total, but in the year after refurbishment the percentage was decreased to 20%. Moreover, the year before refurbishment shows that the amount percentage of people satisfied and very satisfied combined was 45%, but in the year after refurbishment it was increased to 75%. In On the other hand, the number of no response was the same between after and before.
To sum up, I think that museum refurbishment is effective to attract new visitors, so many people have visited the museum. 자료 설명 문제는 필자의 생각이 들어가면 오히려 감점요인이 된다고 해요. 나의 생각이 아니라 자료가 보여주는 총체적인 내용을 정리하는 형태로 마무리하는 게 더 좋을 것 같아요.
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아이엘츠 라이팅 채점기준 참고하세요 - TA/TR(Task Achievement/Task Response) 문제에 정확히 답변, 적정 분량 - CC(Coherence and Cohesion) 일관성, 응집성 - LR(Lexical Resource) 다양한 어휘표현
- GR(Grammartical Range and Accuracy) 문법 다양성, 정확성
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