The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feater.
The given bar graph illustrates information on the number of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled(PMT) through various a vehicle of transportations in 2002.
Overall, it is clear that two incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled showed a similar trend. (비슷한 경향을 보였다는 것은 크게 의미가 없고, 이 표의 경우 demand response 쪽의 수치가 가장 높았다는 점이, 바로 뒤의 문장과 더불어 포인트가 되긴 합니다. 단, 6.5 정도에는 크게 문제는 없어요.) Also, the figure of accidents more accounted for more numbers regardless of the a form of transportation in the given period.
In detail, the amount of demand response was the highest in both incidents and injuries, which accounted for 225 and 173 million PMT respectively in 2002. It was nearly three times higher than type of bus that was the second highest means vehicle of all. Meanwhile, travelers who used buses experienced 76 incidents and 66 injuries.
On the other hand, the majority of rail transport recoded recorded relatively lower incidents and injuries relatively. In case of heavy rail, the figure accounted for at 51 incidents and 35 injuries. Commuter rail was responsible for merely 20 million of incidents and 17 million injuries of injuries in a year.
총 글자수:160자
총 소요시간:22분
단위가 사건사고가 난 수로 million PMT 인게 맞나요?
총평: (6/6/6/6) 6.0
아니요! 단위는 20 Million 이 아니라 20입니다. million 은 거리(마일) 과 연관되어있고요. 지금과 같이 단위가 ~당으로 이루어져있는 경우는 세부적인 분석을 시작할 때, (즉 이 글의 경우 세 번째 문단에서) 한 번 밝혀주시면 그 이후에는 그냥 225, 173, incidents, injuries 이렇게만 적어주셔도 좋습니다. 대신, 한번은 꼭 언급해주셔야 하고요! 수고하셨습니다 :)
+띄어쓰기 오류가 많이 나는데, 이것도 주의해주세요!