▶ Your Answer : Nowadays, there are many people who live with pets and we can easily see easily that they spend too much effort on >> spend 시간 노력 돈 on ~ 입니다 their animals. Some people say that it is unfair, while because people in third countries is starving in these days such as African people. In this essay, the reason why I disagree with the former opinion will be discussed.
In fact, it is true that someone overspends >> 붙여주세요 their salaries to care their pets. For example, expensive foods and luxury clothes for dogs or cats.
However, as can be seen, the products for pets could be a crucial point of economic developments. The industries could be increase a job to work opportunity and it would be a cause to be lead to be a strong country which helps people who cannot eat, because of owing to financial problems.
Furthermore, pets are helpful to people to be grown up with good emotions. Although,>> 콤마 빼주세요 they spend a huge amount of money for their dogs and cats, people living with animals would be happy.
In conclusion, I think, if the government develops the pet industries, the opposite opinion would >> will if 절의 주어가 현재라면 주절의 조동사는 현재가 와야 합니다 be changed.
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