Question: The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This table gives information about the proportion of people from each family type living in poor condition in Australia.
The proportion of people from the sole parent group family type is the biggest, >> while 앞 콤마 부탁드립니다 while the amount of aged couple family's poverty rate is almost five times fewer than a fifth of sole parent's one, 4%(48000) , as the smallest proportion amongst family types.
The group of single and no children type of family accounts for the second biggest reason percentage of poverty with 19%, showing only 20% difference from sole parent's number. There are little gap amongst >> 셋 이상일 경우엔 among 입니다 single aged person, aged couple,>> 셋 이상의 나열의 마지막 항목 앞엔 and 앞에 콤마를 붙입니다 and couple with >> 콤마대신 with 써주세요 no children as all types are below 10%. Especially, the type of single aged person type has took up 6% proportion, which is two times smaller than couple with children's one.
Overall, in that all households living in poverty is only 11%, sole parent's amount of poor condition appears much bigger than the others' occupation , >> whereas 앞에 콤마를 붙여줘야 합니다 whereas couple with children household type accounts for half of the proportion of sole parent's and aged couple type's feature. It shows three times smaller than the one of couple with children type. >> 문장이 심각하게 깁니다 중간에 끊어드렸습니다 또한 첫 문장에 in that이라는 전치사구로 시작하셨는데 그렇게되면 주어 동사가 도치가 일어납니다 하지만 도치가 아닌 문장 형태를 쓰셨습니다
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Task Achievement - 6
Coherence and Cohesion - 5
Lexical Resource - 5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 4
Coherence and Cohesion - 5
Lexical Resource - 5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 4
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