▶ Your Answer : The graphs below shows the number of 'British Emigration' to five different countries that are Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, and France from 2004 to 2007.
In general, except the emigration to Australia, the other emigrants figures are decreased in 2007 compared to 2004.
Firstly, In terms of Britain to Australia, the number of emigrants were slightly above 40,000 in the year 2004. The number was surged to above 50,000 in 2006, and then decreased to almost 43000 eventually.
Secondly, Britain to Spain and New Zealand emigration maintained almost the same tendency that is gradual and continuing decrease. The figure to Spain dropped from almost 35,000 to 28,000 in three years while the emigrant's number to New Zealand has changed from 23,000 to 20,000 in the same period.
Thirdly, the number of British people who were headed to the USA and France was fluctuated from 2004 and 2007. When it comes to the USA, there were 23,000 emigrants in 2004, and the numbers were changed to 19,000, 23,000, and 20,000 in sequence for the next three years. In terms of France, the figure has surged for the first year to 32,000, and then dropped sharply to below 20,000 in the year 2007.
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