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The bar graph illustrates the teacher’s gender genders proportion who taught at six different institutions in the UK in the
year of 2010.
Overall, the female’s proportion was higher
at the pre-school and showing the decreasing trend as the educational level
goes up, whereas the male’s proportion showed the exact opposite of those of females. There was were an equal proportion of genders at the college in the year
of 2010.
The majority of females have occupied in
pre-school and primary school, which portion was about 96% and 90%,
respectively, whereas the males’ proportion in those institutions was were the
lowest of below 10% for both. The proportion for males increased substantially
for Secondary school, which recorded at above 40% in compared to about 58% for
female high school teachers.
As the educational level increased, the
opposite of gender proportion showed the opposite. have showed. At the private training institute,
there was more male’s proportion of about 58% compared to close to around 41% of females.
At university, the gender gap was the largest of the male’s proportion reached
at about 70%, whereas female’s proportion recorded at about 30%. gender gap이 가장 큰 것은 nersery/pre-school항목입니다.
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