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People have
usually divided views on the influences of having too many choices in modern society.
Some people think that selecting too many things (선택지가 많은 것과, 많은 것을 고르는 것은 전혀 다른 사항입니다.) may lead to confusion of their
decisions. Finally many people may have mis-selection and make a wrong decision. In contrast, I disagree
with the idea that making a wide range of decisions that fitted on them accurately
and actively. (이 문장은 글에서 가장 중요한 문장 중 하나인데 의미 전달이 정확히 안 되네요. 어떤 의미로 적어주셨는지 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
To begin with,
choosing in comprehensive options can improve to establish my unique
personality and leading values. To be specific, this can make people think
themselves precisely such as what I want to, What I want to live with my style.
It can build my ego identity and accurate classification of styles. (여기는 일단 문법 오류를 떠나서 주어 통일부터 해주셔야 합니다. 어디에는 my 가 사용되고, 어디에는 people 이 사용되는 등 왔다갔다 하고 있죠. 에세이를 작성할 때에는 1인칭 사용을 최소화하는 것이 좋기 때문에, people 쪽으로 맞춰주시는 게 좋겠죠.)
Another
significant reason is that people can acquire self-custom outcomes by selecting from a wealth of things. Once, it is absolutely natural things with the advances of
technology and science so people have to think adjusting to such changes. As
technological developments go rapidly, individuals are invested in their tastes
by many kinds of surveys, which followed by consequences that fitted and
compacted on customers fast. (이 부분은 어떤 의미로 작성해주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) For instance, people want to can buy products they
want at one mouse click using filters to sort many choices? in many sort of choices.
Overall, choosing
one thing in a wide range of options has positive effects in people improving
their unique personality and their styles. Furthermore, it takes less time to
get good results by using technological devices. So (문장을 and but so 로 시작하지 말아주세요~) for these reasons, I disagree
with the idea that these days people have too many choices.
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