The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart and table give the information about export earnings and the percentage change in values of five types of products during 2015 and 2016.
Overall, the highest most valuable category product was petroleum products, while but textiles had that a biggest increase in value. The only one product that had a decrease of revenue that was gems and jewellery.
Looking at the graph more closely, the country got biggest revenue from petroleum products at about $61 billions in 2015 and $63 billions in 2016, but the increase of value was just 3%, and the most noticeable change was in textiles. Surprisingly, there was 15.24% increase during 2015 and 2016. (여기를 하나의 문장으로 묶어주셔야 합니다. 둘이 같은 논지로 가며, and 이전과 이후는 전혀 다른 내용을 담고 있죠. 이러한 사항, 흔히 쓰는 말로 '낄끼빠빠' 역시 CC에 영향을 주므로 주의해주세요~)
Engineered goods and Agricultural products (소문자 시작해주세요~) also saw a rise by 8.5% and 0.81% in value respectively. However, only one category of gem and jewellery had a decrease from roughly $43 billions of earning in 2015 to about $41 billions of earning in 2016.
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