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This line graph indicates the good quality of water in four countries between 1950 and 2000. >>> 문제에서 너무 따오셨습니다 In addition, it includes the predicted proportion of water quality in 2015. According to the graph, country A’s good quality of water was higher than the that of other countries’ quality with around 97%. However, there was a steady decline in the percentage of good water quality.>> 같은 문장에 비슷한 단어가 나오면 좋지 않습니다 문장 길이도 적절해 끊었습니다 and . Moreover, the percentage went to down to under 95% by 2000. On the other hand, even though the good quality of water of country C fell to 82% in 1960, country C's and country B’s the good quality of water of both country B and country C had moderately risen moderately and reached at 92% and 9% respectively. Country D made a dramatic growth between 1970 and 2000. However, this country still remained the lowest proportion, comparing to the other country >> the other 다음은 단수입니다 the others 라고 해주세요 with 92%. To conclude, the graph shows that country B’s percentage of good quality of water is the highest amongst the four countries with approximately 96%.>> otherwise 는 문장을 이어주는 기능이 없습니다 Otherwise, country D places the lowest quality by 2010.
전체적으로 괜찮게 쓰셨지만 문단을 나누지 않았었으며 quality를 이용한 문장들의 모양들ㅇ ㅣ모두 비슷했습니다 전체적인 그래머도 비슷하게 나왔구요 단어도 다양함을 보진 못했습니다
Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.5 예상합니다 |