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In recent years, some languages, which are not used frequently, have been perishing. I believe that this situation this situation 이 아닌 본인의 생각으로 피력해주세요 This trend of the decreasing number of languages would yield lead to positive results as discussed below.
Nowadays, the flow of globalization has been rapidly changing. Many people, nowadays, are likely to learn many foreign languages to follow the rapid variation. However, To begin with, people could be naturally assimilated with a few languages.>> 본인의 생각은 언어가 적으면 긍정적인 결과를 초래한다죠? 그러면 그 본인의 생각에 대한 주장을 본문의 주장으로 내세우셔야 합니다 세계화의 흐름이 급속하게 변화하고 있다(무슨 말인진 모르겠습니다) 이게 적은 수의 언어가 좋다는 주장이 되진 못하죠 Provided there is single language throughout the world, there will be no language barriers among people on earth. For example, most people across the world tend to study English, trying to contact with native English speakers. It is >> 너무 길어져서 바꿔드렸습니다 또한 because 앞뒤론 because 절을 나눠주려는 콤마는 안 붙습니다 because the >> 언어 앞엔 the 붙지 않습니다 English has emerged as the single most important language which people should essentially learn essentially. As a result, in recent days, people do not undergo some difficulties to communicate with people from different countries through the single language. >> in recent days? 현재 그런 상황이 발생하고 있진 않습니다 이렇게 말하면 아예 틀린 문장이 됩니다
Furthermore, the fewer languages might make people relieve their stresses to struggle with learning strange languages. Most people throughout the world have endeavored to learn foreign languages tongues >> 앞에 language 가 있어 중복 피하려고 바꿨습니다 뒤에 콤마 빼주세요, since it is crucially important to live in contemporary society >> why? to communicate ? 간략하게나마 언급은 해주세요. However, if there are fewer languages around the world, it might render people convenience to learn other languages as long as they study fewer languages >> 반복일 뿐입니다. For instance, the ease with which that people do not need to take the verbal linguistic burden will make people enthusiastic to study languages, making them not be depressed to study many kinds of languages.
To conclude, fewer languages generate many positive outcomes>> such as assimilation and less stress. People can be absorbed to globalization in an easier way with the ways above >> 콤마 빼주세요 , and they might not to be lagged behind toward this era, also . For these reasons, people do would not need to learn various languages anymore.
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아직은 Task1을 써보시는게 좋을 듯 싶습니다 Task1 2~3 번만 더 써주시고 Task2 바로 쓰지 마시고 구조를 파악한 후에 Task2 써주세요 아직은 구조를 잡는 데에는 시간이 필요한 듯 싶네요 그래도 전에 쓴 Task2보단 좋아진 듯 싶네요
Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 4 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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