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Some people think that children should
learn a foreign language at primary school. Others support the suggestion that
young people need to learn a foreign language when they become the level of a
secondary school student. In my opinion, there are more gains than negative points >> There ? 어떤 의견을 말하는건가요?.
The most supportive aspect for this issue
is that the younger children they are the better learners they could be>> 무슨 말이죠?.
Younger kids, from a scientific point of view, seem to regard a new language as
their native language. For this reason, they can are not able to learn non- their mother tongues
as a natural process rather than as a studying>> 이 문장도 말이 이상합니다 . Furthermore, the children who have
been exposed to a variety of languages tend to think foreign languages as a tool to
improve their life after they grow up,>> 콤마 빼주세요 rather than as something to be shunned >> 동작의 주체는 아이들이죠 아이들이 피해지진 않습니다.
On the contrary, there are some experts who
approve the thesis that it is difficult for children at primary school to
acquire a foreign language in terms of the level of acquisition>> 학습의 능력 등을 직접 지적해주는게 습득의 정도? 정도보다 더 확실하고 좋넸네요. That is,
younger children seem to need to spend a lot of more money and time to learn a new
jargon>> 현 문맥에 맞지 않는 단어입니다 , while앞에 콤마 넣어주세요 while secondary school pupils ages would be able to learn it considerably
quickly. However, this perspective has a dark side. Many high school students
do not feel a need to learn a new language because they think they have enough
to study.>> 공부하기에 충분히 가지고 있다 ?? >> 문두에 also so but and or 쓰지 않습니다 Also, they need to acquire it by a studying, >> not이 뒤에 나오려면 콤마를 붙여주셔야 합니다 not by a simple exposure
like such as 가 아카데믹에 더 어울립니다 the younger children.
To sum up, the advantages surpass the
disadvantages in regards to the opinion that it is better for children to learn
a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary level. This is
greatly due to because of the way the children learn a new language like such as a native
language.
논리가 부적절하다고 생각됩니다 말이 이상하다고 표현하겠습니다 쓰는 본인은 알지만 읽는 독자는 모르는 상황이 됩니다 younger 를 많이 쓰셨는데 직접적으로 앞뒤에 비교대상이 없이 그냥 younger를 쓴다면 뭔지 몰라 그냥 young으로 썼습니다 사실 초등, 중학교 학생들 모두 어리지만 어쩔 수 없이 글에 따라 young으로 바꿔드리긴했습니다만 글을 다시 손보시는걸 추천드립니다
Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.5 예상합니다
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