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The chart exhibits illistrates the ratio of population ratio of 65-year-old people from 1940 until 2040 in three various countries.(어디, 어디, and 어디) 나라 써주세요
To begin with, it is clearly seen that the rate of population of whole countries shows an upward trend for the period between 1940 and 2040 whole given period, though there are frequent fluctuations of it in the tree among the countries. >> 오버뷰는 디테일하고 단락 나누는거 아니란거 명심해주세요 In Japan, the population density of over 65 aged people was 5 per cent of the whole population in 1940. There was no particular variation until 2000. >> 이런건 오버뷰입니다 However, in the following period, >> 전치사구 콤마로 구분해주세요 it was anticipated the gentle increase to increase gently until 2030,>> 콤마 빼주세요 from just over 5 to 10 >> 10 what ? per cent ?. Surprisingly, from 2030, there will be an outstanding increase until 2040. In case of 65 aged Swedish people, they recorded just over 5 per cent in 1940,>> 콤마 빼주세요 and the percentage gradually went gradually >> 부사는 동사 뒤에서 수식합니다 up until 2000, >> 콤마 빼주세요 with many variations, also . The population of 65 years Swedish old Swedish people are also predicted to rise more until 2040,>> 콤마 빼주세요 at just over 24 per cent. Lastly, the people in the USA were just under 10 per cent of whole in 1940, and it gradually rose gradually to 15 per cent in 1980. By 2040, the proportion of 65-year-old American populace will be almost triple, compared to what it was in 1940.
Overall, we can it is recognized that the population of 65 years old people marginally increased marginally until about 2000, >> 콤마 빼주세요 and it will fairly >> soar는 부사가 꾸며주지 않습니다 그 자체로도 치솟는단 의미가 있기 때문에요 soar again in the near future.
220자입니다 너무 길어요 40~50자 가량 줄여주세요 너무 하나하나 나열 비교 한 듯 싶습니다 큰 부분만 제시하시면 되는데 불필요한 부분들이 많습니다 가장 크고 가장 작고 가장 차이가 나는 부분 등만 언급하시면 됩니다
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