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The bar chart shows the figure for emigration of British to five diverse countries from 2004 to 2007 reported by international passenger survey/ONS.
Overall, it is clearly seen that the most British people chose Australia to move to, while on the average, New Zealand and the USA were the least popular places. In addition, the general number of British people who immigrated other countries declined.
As is shown by the chart, approximately 40 thousands of British people immigrated to Australia in 2004 and 2005, and it reached a peak at in excess of 50,000 in 2006 along with around a 10,000 decrease by 2007. Similarly, there were fluctuations in a France's trend, by rising figures from about 22 thousands in 2004 to around 32 thousands in 2005, but there were steeply reducing numbers by about 14,000 until 2007.
In terms of the remaining categories, around 35,000 British migrants moved to Spain in 2004 and 2005, and this figure stably decreased to about 27,000 in the period shown. Moreover, the number of British people who moved to New Zealand started at a half of Spain's at 23,000 and dropped to nearly 20,000 in the end. By contrast, USA figures had fluctuated far changed between 19,000 and 24,000 during the periods.
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