Hackers ielts writing academic. P.322 Actual test 1. 첨삭 부탁드려요..
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The bar graph shows high school graduation rate in Mexico, Portugal, and Luxembourg from 2005 to 2011.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that in 2005, the percentage of students graduating from
high school in Mexico was the lowest about 20 percent, and Luxembourg's graduation rate accounted for
the highest share, which was fourfold of Mexico's figure. As time passed, most figures increased except
for Luxembourg's figure. In 2009, the percentage of Portuguese students rose rapidly and peaked at around
95 percent.
Overall, it is clear that the Portuguese graduation rate had the most considerable increase, and the percentage
of Mexican students increased gradually from 2005 to 2011. However, the number of students still lagged behind
the others. On the other hand, the Luxembourg's graduation rate declined slowly throughout the period.
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1. 목표 점수, -> W/R 6.5
2. 다음 시험 날짜, ->미정
3. 이전에 시험을 치렀을 경우 그때의 점수, -> 이제 막 공부 시작했습니다.
4. 현재 글을 시간을 재고, 아무런 외부의 도움 없이 작성했는지의 여부
->시간 측정 못하였고. 외부 도움 없이 작성.
**이제 막 아이엘츠 인강들으며 공부하면서, 처음 작성해봤습니다. 막막하네요 ㅜㅜㅜ
정말 고칠게 많겠지만, 첨삭 부탁드려요~ 감사합니다.