Task 2 (Both Review 유형) - 해커스 정규교재 p. 245 문제
Some people say that web content should be used to instruct children. Others think that it is not helpful in an educational setting. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is a
common belief that web content is not recommended to use for school children.
However, there is a more persuasive argument that learning based on the web
content is useful in an educational setting. (이 글이 그래서 어떻게 전개될 것인지를 짧게 예고해주시는 게 좋습니다.)
On the one hand,
there are concerns that children are more likely to be exposed to the violent
web content while studying through the Internet.
In fact, we can
easily access to any kinds of information from the Internet. It may include not
only educational resources but also violent contents such as pornography or
violent movies. Unfortunately, most children are not good mature (good 은 현재 문맥에서 상당히 상당히 애매한 단어입니다.) enough to filter
this harmful content.
A recent research
demonstrates that the grade of students who have utilized web content for
studying is much lower than others. This is due to the fact that they were
tempted to explore harmful content on the Internet with their weak
controls. (공부하는 대신에~라는 표현으로 바꿔주세요.)
Nevertheless,
utilizing web content is very useful in educational setting because this can
improve accessibility to education, regardless of place in anywhere. By using web content on
education, students who live in the remote area with lack of qualified teachers
would benefit more.
For example, in
Nepal, many schools face with the low attendance rate because a/the majority of
students stay in mountainous areas which are limited to available means of
transportation reaching to schools. Luckily, they are now able to study by
utilizing web content at home rather than attending schools.
To wrap up, while it
is apparent that web content has negative effects on education, it is undeniable
that it plays a vital role in offering more chance for children to study
anywhere. (단순히 윗 내용을 요약한다기보다는, 내 의견을 조금 더 명확히 해주세요~이때 내 의견의 반대편에 있는 사항은 굳이 다루지 않아도 됩니다.)
1. 목표점수: 6.5 - 7.0
2. 시험예정일: 2월 말경 (첫 시험)
3. 작성시간: 39분 (도움 없이)
4. 단어수: 267
인터넷 강의 들으면서 해커스 테스트 처음으로 혼자 작성해보았는데, 쉽지가 않네요.
첨삭 부탁드립니다. 감사해요!
총평: (6/6/7/6) 6.5
시험까지 여유가 있고, 기초체력에 해당하는 어휘/문법이 깔끔한 편이기에, 적어도 task 2에서는 충분히 좋은 점수를 받으실 수 있을 겁니다.
현재 본론의 일부 문장들이 엔터키로 나뉘었는데, 엔터키는 문단이 구분되는 경우에 한해서만 두 번 쳐주시면 되므로, 다른데에는 아예 엔터 없이 스페이스바로 쭉 이어주세요! 이것 역시 점수에 들어가는 사항이므로 주의해주셔야 합니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)