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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of preference for four distinct vehicles such as car, LRT, bus, and taxi by people living in Edmonton and the table shows the reasons why people the residents use their cars in Edmonton. >> 틀린건 아니지만 이렇게 표현하는게 더 자세하고 확실해서 바꿔드렸습니다
At first glance, it is clear from the pie chart that car and LRT are two principal means of transport in Edmonton,>> 콤마 빼주세요 and the table explains that people utilize mainly their cars for commuting to work. As seen from the pie chart, 45% of people prefer to drive their own cars, which accounts for the largest proportion. LRT is the second most popular form of transport with 35%, which is nearly three times as much as the percentage of the others of public the means of transportation. According to the table, surprisingly, 55% of people commute to work by car. Cars The most popular vehicle is also used for business and for taking children to school by with 45% and 40% of drivers respectively. On the other hand, only 15% of drivers go shopping and, similarly, 15% of them travel by car for leisure activities. (158)
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