1. 목표하시는 점수, : 6.0
2. 다음 시험 예정 날짜, : 18th Jan
3. 이전에 시험을 치렀을 경우 그때의 점수, : 4.0
4. 현재 글을 시간을 재고, 아무런 외부의 도움 없이 작성했는지의 여부 : 네
5. 기타 현재 상황
Art and music classes should not be mandatory at school, To what extent do you agree or disagree??
It is true that some people believe art and music classes should not be mandatory at school. However, I am of the opinion that taking these the art and music classes should be a requisiteness for students. This is because Because it can help to develop emotional growth and personalities development for students and allow them to find their own path in the future through as encouraging them to attempt different things.
To begin with, I firmly believe that art and music classes can play an important role in mental and physical development for adolescents. Student can enhance and convey their thoughts not only direct ways such as writing and speaking but also non-verbal expressions through creative activities. Besides, these creative activities are not only mandatory subjects (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 한번 주세요!) and it can be an effective way to unwind from the stress and a burden of daily life.
On top of that, creative activities can enable youth to find their own direction in a life. I strongly believe that schools should offer their students a well-rounded education. It can lead underage to find their strengths and specialties which they have not recognised yet and helps to broaden their horizons and enrich their soul. For example, one of my previous students William who has received offers from many art universities mentioned that if he had not started taking art classes he would have never found his interest and passion in a field of graphic design.
To sum up, physical education (체육은 논외입니다.) and art classes can help to develop emotional growth for teenagers and guide them to find their own path in the future as encouraging them to attempt diverse ways and have different points of view. For these reasons, it is clear that creative activities such as art and music classes should be indispensable at school.
총평: (6/7/6/7) 6.5
지난 시험을 10년 전에 치르신 게 아닌 이상 4.0을 받으셨을리가 절대 없는데...
여하튼 실제 시험에서도 이정도로 쓰실 수 있으면 6.0은 가볍게 넘깁니다. Task 1은 언제나 변수가 되기는 하나, task 2가 현재 글처럼만 유지되면 크게 상관은 없을 거에요. 단, 제가 드리는 말씀은, 현재 글을 Grey님께서 직접 무에서 창조하신 것이고, 모범답안을 필사해서 올리신 게 아니라는 전제가 담겨있습니다. 만약에 후자였을 경우, 그러한 공부방법은 냉정히 크게 도움이 되는 것은 아니라, 주의해주셔야 하고요. 본론 첫 번째 문단의 표시된 부분은 약간 꼬인 것 같은데 해당 부분만 댓글 주세요! 수고하셨습니다 :)
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