▶ Your Answer : These days, more and more>> more and more 보단 increasingly가 좋습니다 또한 이 단어는 부사이므로 동사 뒤에 위치시켜주는 것이 좋구요 people prefer to take a private car rather than a public transportation due to convenience and freedom of movement travelling. Therefore some people argue that the way to reduce traffic and pollution should be increased tax on petrol.>> the government intends to reduce traffic and pollution, with increasing the tax on petrol. There will be two parts of advantages, if people would try to use a bus or a subway instead of a car. One part is for the government. As I already said that by using a public transport would help reduce traffic jam, Especially, using public transport would help reduce traffic jam and especially rush hour and also lead to prevent many accidents. In addition, gas smoke from cars is the main problem of air pollution. The number of cars decreased on the road could contribute to protect the environment. The other part is by individuals. people usually using a public transportation can save their money spent at gas station. Also >> so also but or and 다섯가지는 문두에 쓸 수 없습니다 people could arrive a destination on time by taking a bus on a bus-only line bus lanes as well as subway. However, people who drive everyday with their car for working such as taxi drivers and truck drivers have to pay more money than they can afford paying because of increased of tax on patrol. And some people live away from cities where don’t >> 축약형은 쓰지 않습니다 do not 이라고 써주세요 easily have public transport system easily. So, they need their own car when they come home late. Also rich people may still take their private car, and this policy might be would have burdens to the public. Those people would try to reduce other expenditures, and, finally, it could affect depression of the economy.
In conclusion, this solution is worth considering to improve the current situation, but . However, >> 문장이 길어 잘라드렸습니다 there are advantages and disadvantages of introducing such a policy. 간단한 문법 실수가 많네요 잘들 봐주셔서 자잘한 문법 실수들을 줄여주시길 바랍니다 또한 문법을 다양하게 구사해주시고 더욱 좋은 근거나 부드러운 글 전개 등도 신경써 주시길 바랍니다 Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.5 예상합니다 |