▶ Your Answer : In recent years, there has been a lot of discussions about travellers' responsibility for protecting the culture and nature of the country they visit. Regarding this, some people assert that it cannot be travellers' shares because they are only visitors for a short period of time. However, I strongly disagree with the idea that an increasing number of tourists produce a large amount of litters and bring in new culture to other countries. In this essay, I will support my opinion with examples >> 불필요합니다.
First of all, as travelling industry has significantly expanded on account of development in transport, the number of tourists has been rocketing. This means that people are able to visit remote locations where they could not explore in the past. Understandably, the untouched lands is needed to build accommodation and entertaining facilities. and >> 길어서 끊었습니다 Therefore, it results destruction of the environment as a result, destroy the environment. That is to say, there would be more rubbish than before due to having more population in the region and serious reduction in a variety of wildlife. Thus, it is clear that travellers could have negative effects on the in visiting countries.
Furthermore, local traditional culture of locals would be considerably affected. That is to say, new modern cultures and materials can often result in changing or even making local custom and traditions disappear. In my personal experience, I have visited a local market in the nothern area of Vietnam called BacHa and saw so many souvenir shops selling artificial fabrics that once used to be was >> used to 는 습관적인 반복을 나타내는 것입니다 homemade ones. They no longer make the beautiful fabric at home for their family but buy the cheap artificial ones made in a factory. As the example illustrates, it can be seen that it is very difficult for native people to preserve their own culture when new culture keeps coming in.
To sum up, whereas some people think that travellers are irresponsible for protecting the culture and nature of visiting country. I believe that they have a role to play. This is because they would produce more litters and change the local customs and tradtions just by staying for a few days or weeks. Personally, I think tourists should not try to waste natural resources or throw away too much rubbish, and be careful to respect the country's native culture.
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