In the recent years, distance learning has become popular due to the fact that it is a useful method of education systems. Educational experts, however, say that learning through the Internet has a number of disadvantages. In this essay, I am to explore both merits and demerits>> advantages and disadvantages 를 먼저 써주시길 바랍니다 merits and demerits는 덜 선호되는 편입니다 of the online learning.
First of all, students learning through the online are able to study regardless of time and place. For example, people working full time or single parents alike in the situation where they are forced to go school to study can study at their own paces online. They would be self-motivated by themselves with managing their time effectively>> 그들 스스로 시간을 조절하는 것에 동기부여를 얻는다는 의견에 이견이 달릴 수 있습니다 뒤에 조금의 보충을 해주시면 더욱 좋겠네요 by themselves. Additionally, since the Internet became a valuable searching tool to supplement take lectures, students have accomplished with a thorough understanding of classes by improving the ability to browse the web>> web을 읽어내려가는 능력을 향상시킴으로써 완전한 이해를 가지고 성취해왔다 이건 뭔가 그냥 인터넷을 이용하는 사람들의 능력 발달에 대한 의견이 아닐까 싶습니다 . Therefore, distance learning is an advantageous for providing students with a higher satisfaction of education.
On the contrary, learning through computers isolates children and it does not help them to build relationship skills. This is mainly highly important because it is hard for them to contact peers, which is one of the most important factors contributing to children’s development. They would not be responsible adults. Besides, young learners who cannot have parental encouragement could not concentrate on their studying >> 콤마 빼주세요 because learning through the Internet is that they should study alone. Consequently, the method of learning is the worst educational system for children.
In conclusion, although both positions are comprehensible and reasonable arguments, I completely agree with the former view. The reason why distance learning has more advantages than disadvantages is that it makes learning accessible to everyone.
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