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In modern society, there are considerably various methods for communicating information such as books, radio, television, and so on. All kinds of media have advantages and disadvantages. If I compare with each mothods >> each 단수명사입니다 and choose only one effective device of exchanging ideas , I will >> if 절 동사와 주절 조동사 시제 일치시켜주세요 prefer television to get >> get동산 좋지 않습니다 gain 혹은 acquire 써주세요 other people's thoughts and information with more advantageous functions. >> 서론에선 본인의 글 방향을 제대로 간단 명료하게 제시하는 부분입니다 If 같은 문장은 쓰지 않습니다
Some people like listening to radio because it makes them focus literally on only literal contents with calm, >> and가 아닌 같은 성격의 형용사가 두개가 배치될 땐 그냥 콤마만 써주시면 됩니다 tranquil atmosphere. On the other hand, once readers start reading books to find what they want to know , books the printed materials can give information the most in limited time, comparing with the amount of it provided by the television or the radio. Televisions lead viewers to laugh, but the people do not to contemplate on the digital box more than on books do. However, only the radio only has limited the audience because it is not suitable to listen for students or working people in daylight, while the television can be seen by everyday regardless of ages, places, and time.
In my opinion, the most effective way to exchange opinions is by watching the television. When all is said and done, the television comprises several functions. When it comes to entertainment, the television is the most interesting media as showing performances including variety shows by stimulating visual and acoustic pleasure. Plus, we can choose countless channels from all over the world in this era because of the Internet and transport's development>>운송 수단의 발달과 인터넷의 발달이 TV에 어떤 영향을 끼쳤는나요? 설명이 없다면 표면상으로 전혀 납득이 갈 수 없는 내용입니다. If someone tries to send messages to another one living in an opposite side of the Earth, television programs connect with each other and help their communication.>> TV 프로그램을 이용해 어떻게 메세지를 전달할까요 개인이 개인한테 For instance, when I went travelling >> travelled to European countries, I met many fans of Korean films or dramas. Television's expanded power of sending contents allows them to enjoy Korean entertainment in their own rooms.
In conclusion, even if the other mediumas has huge advantages, I will have to say the television is the most effective and powerful method to communicate and exchange contents exchange. It is because television's various effects to our eyes and ears.>> 이 문장으로 끝입니다 The availablity for all day long and of it allows us to interact with each other in long distance.
우선 정말 냉정하게 말씀드립니다 글자수 줄여주세요 문법으로 점수가 엄청나게 나갈 듯 싶습니다 또한 테스크에서 주어진 다른 항목은 아예 언급조차 하지 않은 것도 있네요 그리고 단어 Television이 이걸로만 표현할 수 있는게 아니니 다양하게 써주시길 바랍니다 Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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