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The four pie charts provide information concerning units of electricity production by five four sources in Australia and France in 1998 and 2000. Overall, there were five categories of fuel sources in two countries, and <(이미 introduction에 전달을 해주신 정보입니다) the gap of total production between 1980 and 2000 hugely increased in both countries. To begin with, coal had was the most highest electricity production in Australia in both years. It figured a half of 100 units in 1980 and 130 units among 170 units in 2000. Thus, units of electricity production by oil and natural gas decreased from 10 and 20 units in 1980 to 2 and 2 units in 2000, respectively. <(what about hydro power?) On the other hand, the use of nuclear power in France showed a similar pattern with the use of coal in Australia, as it accounted for 15 units among 90 units in 1980, and 126 units among 180 units in 2000 in France. It is also interesting that electrical use by natural gas and hydro power in France dramatically fell from 5 and 25 units in 1980 to 2 and 2 units in 2000. <Need coherence> The use of hydro power in Australia and uses of coal and oil in France showed largely the same amount of units during the period. Overall, there were huge fluctuations in units of electricity by fuel source in both countries, especially, proliferation in uses of coal and nuclear power sources was the best shown. <(overall내용을 두번 써주셨습니다. 한번만 써주시는게 더 좋습니다. )
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