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In contemporary society, people have mixed opinions on important elements affecting personality and development. Some people assert that experience is more influential. However, I strongly believe that the characteristics we are born with is take a much more important role. This essay will outline some reasons. To begin with, it is really difficult to change people's their own natural personalities dramatically even if they try hard or have different experience. This is because, we have our specific DNA. DNA has already been decided our personality and appearance when we are born. It is evident that DNA not only cannot be changed by experience but also as well as it affects intensely to our personality. Inherency can be rarely changed by the circumstances. This is why because many children's personality is similar to their parent's.
In addition, DNA affects enormously to people's development. General people cannot go beyond the person who has specific talent which he or she was born with. Such as, Take the example of Usain Bolt and Yuna Kim. They have a perfect body for running and flexibility which was decided by DNA when they was born. The inherency of gene pool from their parents decides their talents and development. Thus, DNA restricts the range of our personality. Overall, heritage characteristics affect to their people's own personalities and capabilities. Any experience cannot win DNA ultimately.
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