▶ Your Answer :
The given table illustrates the proportion
of sense of satisfaction from students in five different services of a
university in 2000, 2005 and 2010.
In brief, what stands out from the table is
that the satisfied rating of print resources is slightly higher than other
services in each years, while students are the most and increasingly unsatisfied with the range of
modules offered over the a period.
In more detail, there were a similar
patterns between teaching quality and print resources as they had a slight
fluctuation between 2000 to 2010. At 2000, print resources was got the highest
rating with 87 percent, and at the end last, it had a lower percentage for 2010 by 1
percent than that of 89 percent for 2005. In addition, teaching quality had
taken at the third top rank with 65 percent in 2000, and it went up to 69
percent in 2010 after it decreased down to 63 percent in 2005.<(2005년도 정보를 주시고 2010년도 정보를 전달해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다.)
On top of this, the only one growth of percentages <(?)
was electronic resources that started was undertaken with the lowest percentage of 32
in 2000, but since that years, it rapidly surged to 72 percent in 2005 and it
peaked with 88 percent in 2010. Meanwhile, range of modules offered was
continually decreased from 2000 and it reached the lowest figure with 27
percent in 2010. Besides, building/teaching facilities remained was remind stable at percentage of 77% in each years.
Score: 6.5 Comment: 내용 정리를 조금 더 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 2010년도 정보를 먼저 주시고 그것을 2005정보와 비교를 해주시는 것 보다는 2005년도 정보를 먼저 주시고 2010년도 정보를 주시는게 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 문법산 word form/collocation/punctuation에 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 그 외에는 글 안에 있는 수정이나 코멘트를 봐주시면 될 것 같습니다. 수고 하셨습니다! |