International travel is becoming
cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do
the advantages of increased tourism outweigh disadvantages?
As a myriad of air-plane companies have
emerged after the developments of cheaper materials that build up air-planes,
people can travel around the world with a small budget. However, that
phenomenon has two-perspective issues. In this essay, I will explain both sides
and give my opinion.
First of all, international tourisms can
financially help a handful of nations. Since such countries generally do not
have any profitable industries such as mobile, IT, or automobile, the tourism
sector in whole industries render the government sustain their economically
stable conditions. For example, even though Greece had a severe economic crisis
last a few decades ago, they could overcome due to the earning from
international tourists. If there were not cheaper flight tickets, many
foreigners would not have chosen Greece as a touristic place.
On the other hand, the trend of tourisms
with cheaper flight tickets and accommodations quickly ruin the environments,
unlike the past. The smaller the budgets to travel to other countries can be,
the more people want to discover un-spoilt and new places across the world.
Such desires encourage commercial companies such as internationally chained
hotel groups to build a large hotel or convenient facilities in the middle of
the mountains or near the ocean. Also, the government will construct hundreds
of roads reflecting upon the necessity of the tourists, which causes divisions
amongst wildlife animals. Such fragmented habitats accelerate the speed of
animal extinctions.
I believe that international tourisms’
disadvantages outweigh those of advantages because once nature is ruined, it is
hardly recovered. On the other hand, in terms of economic situations, the
nations can make their financial conditions better by other means such as
investing in human resources to boost their economy.
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