▶ Your Answer : The given pie charts above describe People for People Charity Group's people of charity group's fund source income and expenditure in 2005. <(그냥 income이라고 하기엔 금액이 나오는게 아니라서 fund source가 더 적합한거같아요. 그리고 People for People Charity Group은 그 그룹의 이름이기 때문에 그대로 쓰셔도 될거같아요)
In general, there are two pie charts containing five sectors each. In the chart of funds by source, they consist of technical assistance, foundation grants, personal donations, union and corporate donations, and earned income whilst the second chart related with allocation have administrative expenses, educational assistance, special projects, financial grants, and civil works.
According to the income in 2005, foundation grants recorded the highest which had taking 48% of this the chart and union and corporate donations and technical assistance were the second at 31% and the third at 10%.<(structure 이 안좋습니다. A랑 B가 2등 3등을했다 라기보단 A가 2등을해서 몇프로고 B는 3등으로 몇프로다라고 하시는데 더 좋습니다.) Surprisingly, earned income accounted for the lowest at 3%. (according to the income 보다는 according to the funds source/first chart/ chart showing funds source가 더 좋을거같아요)
Regarding to the expenses in 2005, the pie showed the similarity among five factors<(뜻은 파이 차트 안에 funding이 들어간 곳은 비슷한 percentage을 차지했다고 들려요). Special projects was the leading sector at 30 %, followed by financial grants at 26 %. The percentage of Civil works was as the same as that of educational assistance in this period. The rate of administrative expenses was approximately eight times lower than that of special projects.
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