People have different views about that university students having to study what they want subjects at an university,. while there are Some argue that students should be forced to study subjects that will be useful in the future. I believe that all of the students should be able to choose their subjects of what they like.
There are various reasons why people believe that an university should only offer some subjects that will be useful in the future such as medicine, engineering and information technology. From a personal perspective, these courses provide more, after graduation, job opportunities, career progression, better salaries, and an improved quality of life for students who take them. On the economical perspective, focusing on technology in higher education would lead to new inventions, economic growth, and greater future prosperity.
(글쓴이의 의견은 나중에 나오고 먼저 관점에 대해서 서술을 해주셔야합니다)>In spite of these arguments, I believe that university students should be free to choose their preferred area of study. In my opinion, our society would benefit more if students are passionate with their preferred courses and they can be expected to act on various field when they are in society. Besides, nobody can really predict which knowledge of fields will be the most useful and important to society in the future. It is no doubt that many employers want to hire people who have creative thinking skills, which can be developed it will be made through learning art, history and philosophy than science or technology.
In conclusion, although it might seems sensible about university students focusing on into useful subjects such as science and technology, but I personally prefer the current system which all of the students have the right to study whatever they like and choose by individual choice.
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