▶ Your Answer : The given charts illustrate the amount of sales of coffee and bananas that was Fairtrade-labelled in each year, 1999 and 2004 in different five different countries of European.
In summary, in terms of sales amount of two items, coffee and banana, both of them climbed in 2004 compared to the first year. Overall, the group was more dramatic in bananas <(?), while that of coffee showed just a slight increase in comparison between the two years.
In more detail, in the first table, Denmark sold coffee in 1999 at with about 1.8 millions of euro, which was the biggest amount of that and then this figure just merely rose raised to 2 millions of euro,. UK followed the second largest amount city <(unclear), with 1.5 millions of euro, whereas five years after, almost as 20 millions of euro coffee was sold, which was a dramatic rise than other countries. <(내용이 많이 unclear 하고 너무 모든 내용을 한 문장으로 해결하실려고 했던 것 같습니다. 그렇기 때문에 clarity/organization이 많이 떨어집니다. 내용을 여러 문장으로 organize해주시기를 바랍니다)
Moving to the next table, in 1999, America UK earned about 15 millions of euro with sale of bananas, which was a comparatively high price than other countries that where just stayed at around between 1 and 2 million euros. In 2004, however, in three nations, UK, Switzerland and Denmark, they reached at 47, 5.5 and 4 millions of euro respectively, while the rest of the two nations, Belgium and Sweden, in other way dropped to 1 and 0.9 millions of euro accordingly.
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