The line graph indicates the percentage of the literacy rate in North America, Asia, and Africa between 1930 and 2000.
Overall, it is clear that the three
countries had increase points from 1930 to 2000. North America showed made up the
largest proportion during the seventy-year period and Africa had the smallest number (이 표에서는 비율만 비교 가능하고, 인원수는 전혀 고려 대상이 아니며, 알 수도 없습니다.) of people that can read and write their languages. The rate in Asia increased
rapidly over the same period.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can
see that the percentage of literacy people in North America accounted for the
largest point among the three countries in 1930, at just under 70%. There was
an increasing trend to 83% by 1980, but since 1980, the percentage started to
decline slightly at the end of the period (감소보다는 유지가 맞지 않나 싶네요. 물론 표에서 다소 애매하게 표현되어서 이런 것까지 정확하게 따지기는 무리가 있긴 합니다.). (앞 문장과 매끄럽게 이어주세요!) The literacy rates in Asia was 39% in 1930. It is noticeable that the rate of people who were literate in Asia number of people in Asia who are literacy
went up the most. As a result of that, in 2000, the rate of the literate people
was almost the same with that in North America. Lastly, the percentage of
Africa recorded the lowest point at the front of the research year at 15%. From
1950 to 1960, the figure was stable and slightly dropped from 1980 to 1990. At
the end of the period, the proportion made up 40% of the total people in the
country, which was about a half of the percentage of both North America and
Asia.
time; 안쟀음 / word:240
총평: (6/6/7/6) 6.5
현재의 6.5는 제한 시간 내에 이대로 작성되었다는 가정 하의 점수이지만, 시간을 안 재셨으면 아마 실전에서는 여기서 더 떨어질 확률이 높으므로, 실전에 적응하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, '수' 와 '비율' 의 구분은 매우 중요하고, 이는 제가 예전에 걸어드렸던 링크에서도 강조된 사항이니까 꼭 숙지해주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)