The illustrations below represent the changes of
the roads and parking lots in a city City Hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall, the accessibility to the hospital was quite improved by renovating the roads and parking lots.
(한번 나눠주세요!)
To be more specific, when it
comes to the roads and bus stations, six bus stations stood across the main
road, namely Hospital Road Rd to the hospital in 2007 were combined into one huge
bus station connecting with two roundabouts in 2010. Also, two roundabouts
connected to Ring Road and City Road occupied occupying some areas in the city hospital and
staff car park in 2010.
Furthermore, the communal park that used to be a
space where the hospital staff and citizen used, were divided into two parking
spaces for the staff and the public respectively. The previous parking area remained
as a staff-only park, and the while a new public park space was constructed in the east
side of the hospital in 2010.
총평: (7/7/7/7) 7.0
잘 써주셨고 간혹 보이는 자잘한 사항과 더불어, 맨 마지막 문장에서는 조금 더 구체적으로 들어가주시면 좋습니다. 새로운 대중주차장은 Ring Road 와 연결되어있으므로, 그걸 표현해주시면 되겠죠. 수고하셨습니다 :)
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