■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Topic ▼ The government should sometimes infringe on people's freedom for the security of society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? |
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Your Answer ▼
It is said that exhaust fumes from automobiles are the main reason
for air pollution. Thus, some firmly believe that imposing a fee can deal with
air contamination. Nevertheless, there is an issue of how to levy a fine for a
long time. Therefore, I partly agree with the opinion that the government
should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during rush hour to
reduce air pollution. Two reasons will be presented below one by one.
On the one hand, the first reason for air contamination is certainly
some materials from the car. According to a survey, most of the scientists
chose exhaust gas as the main reason, thinking that only the government could
control the number of exhaust fumes. However, it is difficult to require operators
not to drive their cars voluntarily without a fine. It is because using public
transportation takes a long time to arrive at their work and is uncomfortable (만약에 8점 이상이 필요하셨다면 여기와 관련해서 어떻게 불편한지까지 적을 수 있어야 합니다만, 6.5의 경우는 지금으로도 충분히 넘칩니다.) when compared with driving.
On the other hand, it is unequal to charging charge a fee-only during rush
hours. All vehicles emit the same amount of exhaust gas irrespective of a time
slot. Also, there are many cars on roads as the rush hour on weekends. Thus,
drivers who usually use their automobiles during the rush hour will feel
uneasiness and criticize the policy. For example, in Korea, the administration levied
a fine on drivers who operate during rush hour. As a result, they faced many
criticisms and changed their policy. (여기는 사실 엄밀히 따지자면 위에서 했던 말에 대한민국만 그대로 붙여서 반복하는 것에 지나지 않으므로, 별로 좋다고 볼 수는 없습니다.)
To sum up, making drivers pay a fee is a good idea
to reduce air pollution. But (문장을 and but so 로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.), if it is applied only during rush hour, that causes
the problem of equality. |
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EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: /9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | /9 | /9 | /9 | /9 |
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Comment ▼ 지금 논제가 잘못 올라와서 점수는 뺐는데, 어차피 점수는 웬만하면 어휘+문법에 비례하기 때문에 6.5는 크게 무리없이 받으실 수 있을 겁니다.
대신 지금처럼 to what extent~~에서 부분적으로 동의하는 건 웬만하면 피해주세요! 지금 글은 깔끔하게 잘 되었지만, 이게 때에 따라 어려운 경우도 있으며 애초에 부분동의가 불가능한 논제도 존재합니다.
수고하셨습니다 :) |
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6.5가 목표입니다. 40분 걸렸습니다!! 항상 감사드려요!! 278단어입니다!