Q. Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular.
Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people, who lost their jobs
because of it.
Online markets are is attracting more and more customers with its their convenience and easy access. However, we should also consider the negative side effects they it may bring to the environment and local job market.
The main environmental concern of online shopping is CO2 emission in the process of delivery. When people go shopping in their neighborhood, they usually drive a relatively short distance or do not use a vehicle. In contrast, logistics is essential in online shopping and the use of fossil fuel for delivery trailers is inevitable. This point may look trivial, but as bigger the scale of online market is, that of CO2 emission will get more significant.
In addition, online shopping increases wastes more than shopping in real markets. Items ordered in online shops are enclosed by packaging, many of which are necessarily made of multiple layers of plastic and vinyl to protect the contents during transportation. Most of those packaging materials produced for online shopping parcels are hardly reusable and it incurs environmental costs to produce process and recycle them.
Aside from environmental problems, purchasing items online also causes unemployment in local community. Using the Internet internet for shopping means that the shoppers can find the goods they want from the wider online market beyond local one in their geographic community. As a result, online shopping impoverishes local businesses and leads to unemployment of people involved in them.
In conclusion, online shopping unavoidably has some environmental social effects. Its delivery process arises CO2 emission and produces excessive waste from packaging. Buying products online also tends to deprive jobs from employees in local businesses.
7월 말 시험에서 7.5가 목표입니다.
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총평: (8/7/7/7) 7.5
글은 크게 문제가 없으므로 이에 대한 설명은 생략하고, 다른 말씀을 드리겠습니다. 7.5는 낮은 점수가 아니지만 Poutine님의 경우 충분히 이를 받으실 영어 실력은 갖추고 계십니다. 고로 영어 자체에 대한 추가적인 공부는 할 필요가 없지만, 대신 모범답안 분석은 철저히 해주셔야 해요. 그 과정에서 해당 답안들에 쓰인 논리 전개 구조와 문법, 그리고 어휘 등을 내 것으로 완벽하게 만들 수 있어야 시험장에서도 안정적인 7.5, 그리고 그 이상이 확보될 겁니다.
다행히도 제너럴 치르시는만큼 task1에서 발목 잡힐 일은 없다고 봐도 무방합니다. 고로 글을 쓰는 것, 첨삭받는 것 등도 중요하지만 그보다는 모범답안 분석에 심혈을 기울여주세요!
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