▶ Your Answer :
The given maps
illustrate the changed of facilities of an islands for tourist between before and
after construction over a period
In brief, the most
striking <(striking what?) is that there are constructed the roads and some talking points<(?) for
tourists,. Also, many the lots of accommodations are built in the a island
In more detail,
before the islands developed, it was almost there were empty and nothing, while after development/construction it
evolved, there have built numerous facilities for tourists were built. First of all At first, a the
reception was placed in the middle of the islands for flexible help to tourists, and on the west side of the reception, there was a huge restaurant was constructed. In addition, there are
nine houses on the east side of the receptions and the rest of the accommodations were was made on the west
side of receptions too.
On top of this, a swimming area was made available on the beach located at the upper west side of the island. the swimming pool was appointed a place up side of beach was still existed
since before it developed. Besides, the roads and footpath were covered on the
ground for convenient mobility, and also by making a pier, boats or cruisers
could be reached to the islands more easily than before.
Score: 5.5 Comment: 하나의 섬을 construction 전/후를 비교 하는 것이기 때문에 islands가 아니라 island라고 해주셔야합니다. 내용은 fair하나 문법에 많이 틀리시고 계십니다. Plurality-singularity/collocation/sentence structure/article 활용/수동태-능동태 활용/표현에 주로 틀리시고 계십니다. 문법에 너무 많이 틀리시면 clarity가 떨어지기 때문에 조금 더 신경을 써주시기를 바랍니다. 또한 표현에 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 일부 표현들이 문맥상 어울리는 표현이 아닙니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |