▶ Your Answer : These two diagrams compare between the amount of energy used and the amount of greenhouse gas emissions from the energy use in an Australian household. Overall, in the first chart, heating is the largest part in using energy of an Australian household. Compared to this, the biggest gas emitting energy use is one is water heating in the second diagram and heating is just the third main part. When it comes to the amount of energy used from an Australian household, the proportion for heating is 42 percent, as the biggest part. Along with this, water heating and other appliances represent the second and third largest part, at 30 and 15 percent, respectively. As opposed to the first chart, in the second diagram, the percentage for water heating is the largest one at the 32 percent. In addition, ratio for heating is just at 15 percent and while the percentage for other appliances is the second biggest part at 28%, by 13 percent compared to the percentage for heating.
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