Your Answer ▼ The line graph shows the information about how much people consumed six different kinds of meat in Spain over a decade. (이 문장은 중의적이므로 수정해주셔야 합니다. 표가 보여주는대로 고기 섭취량을 나타내고 있지만, 동시에 몇 명의 사람들이 고기를 섭취했는지에 대한 의미가 지니고 있어요. 혹시 어떻게 수정해야 할지 모르시겠다면 댓글 주시면 도와드리겠습니다.)
Overall, it is clear that the consumptions of chicken and pork show an the upward trend, with the former becoming the most consumed meat after 2005. In contrast, the figures of beef and duck has decreased overall and those of veal and goat have remained relatively stable, recording lower figures than the others.
Looking at the graph more closely, it is apparent that the chicken consumption surpassed that of beef by 2005, at which point it started surging around 350 grams per person per week over the following 6 years. On the other hand, the beef consumption plummeted by nearly 200 grams from 2005 to 2007, and then increased again to around 500 grams by 2011. Meanwhile, the consumption of pork surpassed that of duck, at nearly 400 grams in 2004, to become the second most consumed kind of meat. At the same time, the figure of veal was equal to that of goat, and both remained unchanged from 2009 to the end of the period in the question. (이 문단의 경우 내용상으로나 문법상 오류는 없습니다. 그러나 the consumption/figure of ~~ 의 문장구조가 너무 자주 쓰이고 있으므로, 가끔가다가 다른 유형의 문장을 활용해주시면 좋을 것 같아요.) |