The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph
illustrates information on the consumption amount of different spreads including
Margarine, Low fat& reduced spreads and Butter each person in a country
between 1981 and 2007.
Overall, it
is clear that the figures of margarine and butter all of the consume number showed a downward trend while that expect for the figure
of Low fat& reduced spreads was seen to depict a relatively increasing trend over the given period. (일단 여기에 msg 를 쳐드리긴 했는데, 사실 이게 중요하다기보다는, all 의 사용이 부적절하다는 것을 더 명시해주세요~세 개 중 2개를 가지고 all 로 표현하기에는 매우 어색합니다.)
In detail,
in 1981, consumers spent (여기도 이전에 비슷한 문제가 있었는데, 이 표는 사용 자체와는 아무런 관련이 없습니다.) to Butter at approximately 140 gramms (m 하나는 빠집니다. 다른데에도 다 수정해주세요~) which the number
was the higher than the others sectors. Over the next 5 years, it reached a high
of 160 gramms, before experiencing a dramatical drop to 100 gramms by 1991.
Meanwhile, consumption of Margarine (소문자로 시작해주세요~) stood at slightly under 100 gramms in the
previous year. The amount fluctuated constantly raining from 40 to 80 gramms for
21 years.
However, no figures were given for given for Low fat&
reduced spreads during 15 years but, by 1996, Low fat& reduced spreads
revealed although it recoded the lowest as only about 10 gramms at that time.
After 5 years, the consume consumption amount reach a peak at 80 gramms.
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