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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Your Answer : The graph illustrates the popularity of 3 principle primary languages which students will study from 2020 to 2030. It can be observed that there will be a considerable rise on the number of students who will study English between 2020 to 2024. >> 문장이 너무 길어서 잘라드렸습니다 but However, the popularity of English will slightly decrease slightly to around 600 million in 2026. Then, it will be recovered in 2028 and marginally increase marginally in 2030. There will be almost the >> same 은 the와 같이 다닙니다 same number of students who will study Spanish and Mandarin in 2024 and 2026. The number of students who will study Spanish will start at around 200 million and gently grow by 300 million between 2020 and 2030. By contrast, there will be a rapid increase of Mandarin's users popularity, starting accounting for at 100 million and it will grow to around 600 million in 2030. Overall, it shows a upward trend of the popularity about three languages between 2020 and 2030. Consequently, and English will still be the most popular language to students in the period.
전에 작성하신 글에도 starting at 의 꼴이 많던데 차지한다의 의미인 account for 혹은 take up 등도 좋습니다 다양한 어휘를 구사해주시길 바랍니다 문장은 한 줄에서 한 줄 하고 3분의 1 정도가 적당합니다 Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6 5.5지만 단어나 문법 조그만 신경쓰시면 6.0 이라고 봅니다
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