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In the modern world, many people believe that education, especially higher education, should be provided to public at no without any cost. Some people argue that the government should be responsible for assisting its nation and society with free education. I do not believe this is the best solution for this issue. Regarding the statement, advantages and disadvantages regarding the statement will be discussed before a reasoned conclusion is reached.
There is no doubt that education can enrich one's skills and make a person more intelligent. Free education can create a community of more educated >> more educated community consisting of individuals, who can contribute more to the society with their newly achieved abilities and knowledge. If the government is to provide financial assistance for public's education, more members of the society may be interested in enhancing their academic skills, comparing to when one had to pay for their own education. For example, if one could do not afford the cost of education on his own, the government support can support him/her and provide opportunities to the person, who may hold potentials >> 무조건 단수입니다 to become a valuable member of the public after receiving further education. >> 계속 수식에 수식을 하려고 하시네요 그러면 설득력, 글의 재미, 이해도 모두가 떨어집니다 원어민이 읽는다 할지라도요
On the other hand, there are some drawbacks related to this issue. Firstly, the new policy of free education may result in very high expenses for the government. The expenses associated with free education will be a the responsibility of the government alone, which may cause a dramatic imbalance in the budget planning of the government >> fiscal status. Secondly, even if the government is affordable to the expenses, the enormous amount of money may be wasted if when participants of free education decide to stop pursuing a career in the area or decide to drop out as it may not suit their interest. Lastly, some people may think that there are more important sectors of the society that needs more assistance, such as for health and well-being life. It may be unreasonable for the government to spend a large sum of money only on >> spend 시간 노력 돈 on 입니다 one area.
Higher education can surely provide more opportunities, which can enrich the society and create a more intelligent community. However, providing free education to everyone with no conditions does not seem to be the most appropriate solution. I hope that more scholarship opportunities are provided, instead of free education, to those who are enthusiastic about learning so that the government's effort does not become all in vain.
수식에 수식이 계속 잇달아서 일어나네요 그 수식들이 뒤에 가선 이미 앞에서 나온 얘기들을 보충하구요 보통 라이팅 초기에 많이 하는 실수입니다 원어민마저도 이런 연속적으로 많이 나오는 수식들을 보면 힘들어합니다 그냥 읽기를 싫어하죠 잘 쓴 글을 보면 글이 수식에 수식이 잇달아 일어나지 않습니다 한 문장일지라도 본인의 생각을 충분히 피력하죠 참고해주시길 바랍니다 또한 글이 길 땐 줄여서도 본인의 의견이 드러나게 잘 만지는 것도 본인의 글쓰기 능력입니다 중점 내용이 있고 그걸 파악하고 있다면 충분히 가능하죠 연습해보시길 바랍니다
Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.5 예상합니다
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