▶ Your Answer :The internet has forever changed the lives of human beings globally. Not only has it connected people all over the planet with each other and changed communication, but it also affected the usual way and system regime of work, as well as created new forms of employment, such as freelancing. Although the internet allows employees to efficiently work outside of the office, many companies still prohibit such a practice. Allowing employees to work from home should be practiced on a wider basis due to a number of significant reasons.To allow employees to work from home means to balance the eternal “work-family” scales. According to a Penn State study, being able to work outside of the office (at home, mostly) helps to avoid typical conflict situations which arise when a person cannot spend enough time with their family. Besides, working from home relieves an employee of the daily stress connected to the necessity to get to their office regardless of health conditions, weather, family circumstances, and so on. According to the Work Without Walls survey, among the benefits connected to working from home are the following: a less stressful environment (38%), a quitter atmosphere (43%), an elimination of a long commute (44%), less distractions (44%), increased productivity (45%), saving money on gas (55%), and a great work/home balance (60%). 보통 자료는 비율이 높은 것부터 나열하는 경우가 많으니 참고하세요~ At the same time, according to the survey, the lack of control and the inability to see results of work in practice may negatively affect productivity of those employees who work from home. 집에서 일할 수 있는 기회를 늘려야 한다는 입장의 글이므로 반대되는 내용은 논리 흐름에 방해가 됩니다. survey내용만 제시하는 게 아니라 이 내용에서 입장과 연결할 주제를 함께 제시해서 논설문 형태를 만들어주세요.
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결론 문단을 만들어주세요. 서-본-결 구성을 갖추지 않으면 Task Achievement 평가에서 감점요인이 됩니다. 서론이 너무 양이 많은 것도 균형 면에서 감점요인이 될 수 있어요. 서론은 간단하게 정리하고 본론에서 주장하려는 내용들을 논리적으로 풀어주세요. 수고하셨습니다! 아이엘츠 라이팅 채점기준 참고하세요 - TA/TR(Task Achievement/Task Response) 문제에 정확히 답변, 적정 분량 - CC(Coherence and Cohesion) 일관성, 응집성 - LR(Lexical Resource) 다양한 어휘표현 - GR(Grammartical Range and Accuracy) 문법 다양성, 정확성
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