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In modern days, people who are interested
in health have significantly increased. There is a growing debate over whether the government should spend more money on curing sick people; I believe that they
need to focus on preventing diseases.
It is clear that governments are faced with
the challenge of giving people the chance to lead satisfying lives. Most of
all, public money should mainly spend on advance the quality of lives and
public health. Especially, lower-income individuals who have serious diseases
cannot afford to treat diseases and would be a big burden. Governments should
not let people give up their life due to the cost. Also, treating illness plays
the most decisive role in developing new methods of cures and medicines.
On the other hand, it is more essential
treatments that knowing how to prevent diseases. Using money on prevention
education, the public can increase the knowledge of health and help to fix their's bad life habits. For example, people who have no time to caring for their health by
busy social life have an opportunity to get free physical examinations that
offer from governments. In addition, prevention has a positive effect on the economy.
The government is able to save public money and use them to other welfares.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that
illness has a severe impact on our lives. People always have to consider the way to protect our health or diseases.
각각 문단 also, addition 뒤에 더 써야 할것같은데 생각나는 아이디어가 없어서.. ㅠㅠ 많이 부족하네요
추가로. 질병을 예방하는 방법을 아는 만큼 더 중요한 치료법은 없다..? 이런식으로 작성하고 싶었는데요 there is no cure as important as knowing how to prevent diseases. 이렇게 작성해도...뜻이 통할까요? 첨삭 감사합니다.
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