The chart illustrates the percentage of employees in three different categories in South Korea over the period from 1981 to 2011.
Overall, the proportions of employees in services reported by far the greatest figures throughout entire research period, while other sections changed their rank.
As clearly seen from the chart, the figure for workers in services was the highest by about 50% at the beginning of the period, continuing to rose to almost 70%.
On the contrary, the percentage of people who work in agriculture dropped significantly from around 32% to 5% over 30-year period.
Turning to employment rate in industry, the figure remained stable by approximately an average of 30% throughout whole period, overtaking that in agriculture in about 1984. Also, the figure in industry reached a peak of roughly 35%, which is about half of that in services at the end of the period.
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