Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others, argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is a debate over the ways of dealing with difficulties which we can face be
faced in our life like the lack of money or unwanted work. Some might just
accept the situation with an open mind while others are struggling to get make
differences.
For the former’s point of view, it makes sense when we consider the excessive efforts that must be invested to change the situation. Instead of making hard life harder by putting overwhelming pressures to oneself, just getting used to the coming situation can be a smart choice. Considering the fact that good chances are coming again after a hardship, spared energy and will secured through the tactical endurance during the first hardship can give the strength to catch the next chance.
However, the latter’s
perspective can be different. Moving away from the coming challenges only make
oneself as a fugitive. Only by By doing one’s best to cope with the situation, we can
get the precious rewards that cannot be bought. First of all, hard efforts can
make the difference in the cruel situation. For example, great shortage of
money can be changed into small shortage of money while job loss can be improved
to re-positioning. Secondly, even though the situation does not changed,
challengers can learn the lessons for the next game that cannot be acquired without
the challenge.
My opinion is also same with
the latter’s point of view. Though the former former’s view is somewhat sensible, that
view (짧은 기간에 벌써 세 번이나 쓰였기 때문에 좋지 못합니다.) lacks the important mental legacy that underpins it. Mankind has always
tried hard to win the difficulties by developing new skills or invent
revolutionary solutions through sacrifices. Those tremendous efforts made the
developed society that we live. Thus, we must continue this legacy from the
small points in our lives. Instead of running away from difficulties in our
lives, cultivating social culture that face the challenge and find the best
solution through hard efforts can lead to the success of our society and
individuals in the long run.
총평: (7/7/7/7) 마찬가지로 잘 쓰인 글이긴 하나, 그루트님의 영어 실력에 비해 종종 자잘한 오류가 보인다는 점은 아쉽네요. 또한 결론의 맨 마지막 문장처럼 view 가 3연타석으로 쓰이는 것은 피해주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)