One of the best methods to motivate and encourage workers is to pay them according to what they produce or sell. Do you think this is the best method?
It is a common belief that the best way to motivate the employees is giving out the salary according to their performances. Some say pursuing money is not the ultimate goal of one’s life. However, I firmly believe compensation by one’s performance is the best methods to generate more productivity.
First of all, money is one of the essential parts of a human’s life. A majority of people actually endure their tired and boring work time because of the wages they can get afterwards. Like this, salary is surely a thing to consider when people decide their workplace. As the paying by the one’s record is the most effective methods, (지금 분량 보충이 필요한 편이기도 한데, 어쨌든 그걸 떠나서 이 부분에 대해서는 더 자세히 설명할 필요가 있습니다.) nowadays numerous companies apply this system to encourage their employees, hence it proves that it is the most effective method.
Furthermore, it is fair for workers being evaluated and compensated. In the workplace, unfortunately, not all the workers are trying their best. To be more equitable, the person who works hard and generates profits than others should be rewarded. If all the employees are paid the same, they will have no reason for trying their best, because they will be paid the same as those who just sit on the chair meaninglessly waiting until the end of the day (이런 식으로 msg 도 잘 쳐주셔야하고요.).
To sum up, there are some ways to encourage people to work harder. However, I believe the method such as of paying based on one’s performance creates the most effective results among workers. This is because it is human instinct to pursuing pursue money and also it is fair for employees.
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