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The mobility of technology has become popular amongst young children as they can benefit from it while enjoying dynamic activities. In this regard, it is often argued that it can be dangerous for them to use mobile phones. However, the opponents and I do not agree with them. In this essay, I will discuss why having their own phones is helpful.
There are some disadvantages of the early exposure to cell phones. Actually, the reason why smartphones are so popular is because it is designed to addict users, and young users easily become its victim. (target도 괜찮을 것 같습니다.) This is because they can learn anything fast and always be a good user of any new devices. However, most applications on their phones are made without much consideration of the young users, and its addictive contents can harm them. (이 문단의 경우 여건이 되면 addictive content에 관한 짧은 예시를 들어주시면 좋습니다.)
However, it can also be advantageous for children to use their phones. It helps them to stay connected with their parents wherever they go. The crime rate nowadays is considerably high, and many parents are worrying about it. However, since most smartphones support many kinds of messenger applications and global positioning systems, they can get more information about where their children are. (초단위로, 분단위로 체크해준다~라고 적는 것도 괜찮죠.)
In conclusion, I believe it is not harmful for children to have cell phones. This is because it prevents any possible dangers that they can meet away from home and ensures their safety. |