<Topic> Some people
say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular
species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental
problems. Discuss
both views and give you opinion. |
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It is true to
say that endangered species is considered as one of great concerns of human beings,
however, there are some people who think that we have more urgent environmental
issues than the disappearance of animals and plants. In this essay, both
viewpoints will be discussed and the reason will be suggested as to why I would
like to support the latter opinion. Many experts opine
that the loss of species brings a huge crisis on the Earth. One reason can be
that, it may disrupt the natural cycle. For example, if bees become extinct, no insects
may carry the flower power, then plants cannot reproduce their species, subsequently,
plant-eating animals cannot feed themselves. According to the example, it is
clear that nature is relatively connected. Thus, if the cycle is interrupted,
it might give detrimental impacts on not only human extinction but also food chains.
As food chains have been evolved from the birth of the Earth, all plants, insects,
animals living in the sea and land, and mankind are related by ‘nature rule’.
Once this However, it To condense, although
endangered natural species is a massive problem that human-beings have encountered |
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