The charts depict the information about the objectives and problems of travelling in USA. Overall, the majority of (여기는 진짜 많은 학생들이 틀리는 사항인데, 이에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다. 결론만 간단히 알려드리자면, majority는 수치가 최소 70% 정도는 되어야 사용 가능합니다.) people living in USA travel for work and concern about costs.
As for objectives of travelling, working occupies about a half of the list which is 49%. This is the largest proportion in the list and followed by personal reasons which represent 19%. 16% of travelers do journey travel to buy something and individuals enjoying social and recreation make up 10%. The smallest percentage is seen happen in the list of visiting friends and relatives, which constitute for only 6%.
In regarding to problems about travelling, the main weakness is price of travel, which is chosen by 36% of travelling individuals. 19% of people are worried about safety, and this is similar to aggressive drivers that account for 17%. Highway congestion become problems of make 14% of the total problems and the remaining list is marginal, including access to 8% public transport and 6% peace for pedestrians.
총평: (6/7/7/7) 7.0
간만에 칭찬을 드리겠습니다. 실제 어땠는지는 제가 알 길이 없지만, 적어도 이번 글의 결과물만 보면 모범답안을 많이 공부해서 적용해보려고 하신 게 글에 드러나네요. 문장 구조가 이처럼 다양화되면 정말 금상첨화입니다. 물론 아직 자잘한 부분들에서의 오류는 있지만, 그래도 이정도면 괜찮습니다.
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