■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Many educational institutions give greater importance to subjects related to science and ignore subjects such as drama and literature. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development? |
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A variety of educational institutions ranging from elementary school to university pay more attention on educating science subjects rather than literature subjects. It is an inevitable phenomenon to concentrate concentrating on science education in the era of the 4th industrial revolution (대문자 시작입니다.), and the current pandemic makes people emphasize on scientific research to make innovative treatment to protect citizens from contagious disease. More educational choose their direction toward investing affordable resources like finance to improve quality of science modules. I absolutely agree this flow of adaptation and this essay will examine my personal opinion. (여기는아마 스스로도 느끼셨을 겁니다. 느끼셨어야 해요. 확 간추리셔야 합니다.) Firstly, the most important role of educational intuitions is to help students adapt appropriately in modern society as soon as possible. For instance, there are so many job applications that can be only suitable for someone who has scientific knowledge. If they do not have sufficient ability that many companies request, it can be hard to find a job. It is the most efficient way to acquire specific skills that society requires in competitive society so that educational intuitions should make students prepare for the rapidly changing atmosphere of the contemporary age. As I mentioned, a pandemic makes this trend more fast as all global countries want a vaccine desperately, it is mandatory to do more science education to produce talented pharmaceutical researchers. Secondly, in artistic subjects like literature, it is much more informative class to get student to watch artworks depending on personal taste and feel themselves freely. It is so subjective that teacher cannot teach all the students with the exactly same class materials. For example, when people appreciate same artworks, it does not matter whether they feel it is gorgeous or disgusting as. There is no correct answer. I reckon artistic class is sufficient enough for students to get appropriate education in household respectively so that education institution can concentrate on conveying more practical subjects related to science. (지금 두 본론 모두 다시 쓰셔야 합니다. 이에 대해서는 밑에서 말씀드릴게요.)
To recapitulate, we cannot ignore artistic subjects that sometimes inspire us strongly, it cannot help escaping from weigh more importance on objective subjects in most educational institutions. (이것도 다시 쓰셔야 합니다. ~의 원인은 ~이고, ~가 긍정적인 이유는 ~이기 때문이다. 라고 적으셔야 해요.) |
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EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: 6.0/9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | 5/9 | 6/9 | 7/9 | 6/9 |
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Comment ▼ 학생들이 글을 기계적으로, 혹은 유형별로 접근하다보면 이러한 문제가 생깁니다.
지금 글은 ~가 긍/부정적인 이유를 2개 쓰는 게 목적이 아닙니다. ~의 원인을 하나 쓰고, ~가 긍/부정적인 이유를 하나 쓰시면 돼요. 논제에서 두 개의 질문을 주었기 때문에 거기에 맞춰주셔야 합니다. 다른 유형처럼 '오케이, 긍정 2개 쓰면 되겠지?'라고 생각해서는 안 됩니다.
본론1에서는 ~의 원인은~~~으로 시작해서 현상의 원인을 밝혀주시고, (물론, 지금 본론1의 내용 자체는 어느정도는 원인이라고 볼 수 있습니다. 대신 틀은 바꿔야 해요.) 본론2에서는 ~가 긍정적인 이유는~으로 시작해주시면 됩니다.
절대 기계적으로 접근하지 말고 논제를 매번 꼼꼼히 읽고 요구사항에 맞춰주세요! 기계적인 접근으로는 6.0, 아주 잘 쳐줘도 6.5가 한계입니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)
+이 글은 아예 쌩판 처음부터 다시 쓰시고 새로운 글로 검사 받으세요! 방금 드린 피드백을 잘 소화하셨는지 확인이 필요합니다. 현재 글에서 일부 수정하는 것이 아닌, 아예 백지에서부터 새로 시작하시면 됩니다. |
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목표 점수는 7.0, 걸린 시간은 44분입니다(검토하다가 본론 1이 이상한거 같아서 다시 쓰느라 오래걸렸습니다ㅠ) 항상 감사합니다!!