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In the modern
society, there are many problems with the scientific development. Some people
claim that people don’t >> do not 이라고 풀어서 써주세요 use anymore the scientific materials>> 과학 물질이 뭔가요?, instead of suggesting
the environmental things >> 그 환경적인 것들은 뭔가요?. This essay will discuss both sides of problems affected by
technology and answered the given question.
On the
nevgative side, it has risen an environmental problem such as air pollutions
because of the car development of cars. Moreover, people do not like to walk too much
and prefer to drive their car for a long time>> 오래 차를 운전하는 것을 좋아하는 것보다 그저 차를 운전해서 가는걸 좋아하는게 아닐까요?. For this reasons, nowadays, their health and
fitness are worse and worse nowadays and we cannot browse >> 어떤 뜻으로 쓰신건가요? around the city. In
this regard, we must reflect our life much more than the past and do not rely only
on technology only. >> 어떤 우리의 삶을 반영하는거죠?
On the positive
side, it is related on development of computers and the Internet developed. These are very
comfortable for busy people. They can online shopping online on the internet and do
not need to worry about household works such as vegetables and fruits for
cooking>> household 보단 cook이 낫겠네요 cook with vegetable and fruit. Secondly, labour ability workforce has risen a lot through the technical
machines. In companys and factories, machines work much more and faster than
humans, so that people can produce more materials than the past. Furthermore, they
can save the money without paying investment on labour labour investment.
In conclude,
developed technology will lead people to
good ways in the life, if humans control well themselves about health and
pollutions. In case of pollution, we have to be interested in environmental
problems much more. >> 비교급이 나오면 than을 필요로 합니다
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